Thlog 7

Thlog 7

We had only one class in this week due to the long weekend. I went to San Diego, which is a beautiful and comfortable city, in the long weekend. And I visited the San Diego see park, where is the most amazing place I have been, and I saw many animals, which I have not seen before.

         Let us talk about our class. In Wednesday’s class, we submitted the WP2 draft, and we mainly modified our WP2 draft. Firstly, we are asked to point out what is improved most in the WP2 comparing to WP1, and what should have do better. I believe I did better in the outline part. I write what I want to write in the outline in the beginning, then I will not forget what I was thinking in the process of writing. In addition, I think I should have to write more specific and give more evidence in WP2. That is my own feedback from writing WP2.

         Then, we have peer editing part. We are divided to three person group. Each person should read and give advises to others’ essays. One of my groupmate suggested that I should connect paragraphs more connected since my paragraphs are not so connective that like two separate things. Maybe I can write some transitive sentences between paragraphs. And the other group mate pointed out that I have several grammatical mistakes in essay. It indeed is my writing problem. I should have to revise those grammatical mistakes before handing the draft in. Both of my group mates gave precise advice to me. I can revise my draft according to their draft. I believe I can do better in the final draft.